I'm having trouble coming up with something, so let me type up some copy-editing stuff to warm up...
The second point seems incomplete, cutting off after "She is supported by".
There are typos in "Sex before the right of passage", "Men who leave a family [...] spends", "Many men take this option as it hold".
The first sentence of the last-but-second bullet point seems incomplete, though from context (and parallelism with a previous one) what's missing is probably something along the lines of "has to leave the household".
The first sentence of last point, too, though what's missing is probably "dies".
The last two points are the ones that bring up questions, such as "what do they consider 'sex'?"
I'm wondering how this enforced gender balance works out, particularly since the way you describe it, once someone leaves a household due to a death, they are out of things for good. I mean, around here a widow or widower can re-marry, but in your plan there seems to be no way to join a household after leaving one due to a death. Doesn't that lead to rather many people being pulled out of the gene pool because of something that happened to someone else?
If unattached males are given the most dangerous tasks, would there be a surplus of women in the population? If the women who assist the priestesses got there due to male deaths in their households... hm, what if a household has a new daughter come of age, but can't find a male to adopt "for her", because the unattached males in the area either got themselves killed, or are "widowers" and thus not allowed to join another household?
Just some random thoughts to throw out there, not sure all of them make sense.
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Date: 2011-12-26 08:15 pm (UTC)The second point seems incomplete, cutting off after "She is supported by".
There are typos in "Sex before the right of passage", "Men who leave a family [...] spends", "Many men take this option as it hold".
The first sentence of the last-but-second bullet point seems incomplete, though from context (and parallelism with a previous one) what's missing is probably something along the lines of "has to leave the household".
The first sentence of last point, too, though what's missing is probably "dies".
The last two points are the ones that bring up questions, such as "what do they consider 'sex'?"
I'm wondering how this enforced gender balance works out, particularly since the way you describe it, once someone leaves a household due to a death, they are out of things for good. I mean, around here a widow or widower can re-marry, but in your plan there seems to be no way to join a household after leaving one due to a death. Doesn't that lead to rather many people being pulled out of the gene pool because of something that happened to someone else?
If unattached males are given the most dangerous tasks, would there be a surplus of women in the population? If the women who assist the priestesses got there due to male deaths in their households... hm, what if a household has a new daughter come of age, but can't find a male to adopt "for her", because the unattached males in the area either got themselves killed, or are "widowers" and thus not allowed to join another household?
Just some random thoughts to throw out there, not sure all of them make sense.